tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post959046725254385168..comments2023-10-29T05:01:28.321-07:00Comments on Word Paint: Sitting within, my heart growssallylynnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01257347406415098444noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-21358974475505652932009-06-08T13:12:13.394-07:002009-06-08T13:12:13.394-07:00I really enjoyed your poem! The words flowed very ...I really enjoyed your poem! The words flowed very nicely. It was easy to feel the happiness that you were talking about! I agree the orange sunset showed great imagery! good job!Tiffany Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11553519063939668162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-58296594094516773272009-06-07T21:05:35.847-07:002009-06-07T21:05:35.847-07:00Great job with the pantoum format, the lines reall...Great job with the pantoum format, the lines really flow together nicely. I easily picked out the grows, crows, borrow, sorrow, etc. sound pattern. One tip I would give is that with this kind of poem to not use the punctuation to avoid end-stops. Enjambment would help this poem flow more consistently. Also the orange sunset line was a great metaphor and at the same time created distinct imagery.Edwin Garciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14494161085535368830noreply@blogger.com