tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post7563009580281331554..comments2023-10-29T05:01:28.321-07:00Comments on Word Paint: Here, I Brought You Some Flowers... And Now I'm Leaving.sallylynnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01257347406415098444noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-3469181808668661382009-06-22T07:22:02.437-07:002009-06-22T07:22:02.437-07:00Wow. I really liked this poem! It brought tears ...Wow. I really liked this poem! It brought tears to my eyes, very moving. I really like the last line, that this person he/she is thinking of is the last thought before they go. The guilt this person is feeling for dying is expressed throughout the poem and is so sad. I also like the line "heavy and black are the sounds of my demise," it brings a visual to this person's end. I know there were limits on lengh, but if it could go farther, I would have liked to hear about the relationship between these two. VERY nice poem.JWinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17114288767666586383noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-41318609579477998642009-06-21T18:33:07.192-07:002009-06-21T18:33:07.192-07:00Damn Drew, I thought this poem was exquisite and m...Damn Drew, I thought this poem was exquisite and moving. I think that the theme played heavily on this masterpiece of yours. A very good job with the imagery and the line breaks induced me to accelerate through the poem. These gave it a great pace and even better finish which I raced to get to. I am not generally sentimental but I felt horrible for this person after reading this and that is why I chose to comment. I do not know where to start even as I am finishing this comment. Despite its greatness I would have enjoyed some punctuation to allow me some time to digest the feelings in this poem because they are so rich that I feel they were needed. Please do not take offense because this is the best poem I have read on here I just think that your work is so deep that a moment to rest is warranted. Truly a great job on the imagery and meaning of the poem. Nice job and best of luck in the future. :)Ian Schraderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10243552067990646699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-56587971682251476272009-06-21T18:31:31.011-07:002009-06-21T18:31:31.011-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Ian Schraderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10243552067990646699noreply@blogger.com