tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post4284692069237919989..comments2023-10-29T05:01:28.321-07:00Comments on Word Paint: Seesallylynnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01257347406415098444noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-82319847311496727422009-06-08T11:55:22.541-07:002009-06-08T11:55:22.541-07:00Great use of similies to create imagery "as e...Great use of similies to create imagery "as empty as the pockets of nomadics." I also felt that your line breaks were perfectly placed and really strengthened the poem. The ending of the poem threw me off though. It stood so strong, but the last sentence seemed (for me) to have popped out from nowhere. I see what you are describing, but I'm not sure that was the best way to put it. Everything flowed so nicely and had me hooked until that last line I thought, "huh?" It may be personal preference though, too. Overall great job Becky!Jordan Deehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03845400846702504607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7242991642154434734.post-4637657934269626212009-06-04T17:36:31.087-07:002009-06-04T17:36:31.087-07:00I liked that you are trying to use enjambment. Som...I liked that you are trying to use enjambment. Some lines did take on a life on their own and others I didn't feel as strongly about. That may have been your point. I'm still trying to grasp this technique:) I loved how you ended your poem, it shed light in an otherwise dark scene.Kara Cavinesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05999327019595243876noreply@blogger.com